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Post by riverwish on Aug 23, 2011 16:21:18 GMT -6
~chapter one~ Riverkit~hostility~ Riverkit blinked.she felt a sharp prod on her side.the gray kit opened her eyes to view tall clusters of reeds.she sniffed the air.her belly growled.she looked up to see a pretty gray pelted she cat with blue eyes."who are you?"riverkit meowed.
The gray she cat bent down to lick the gray she kit."she purred happily."i am downyfeather."
River kit jumped when she felt a sharp prod on her back.she turned.a gray she cat with a white mouth and blue eyes looked crossly at her."are you coming or not?no time for introductions but ill say one thing-mistkit."
Riverkit stumbled to catch up with mistkit."I'll say one thing-ughh."
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Post by Midnightstar on Aug 23, 2011 16:36:50 GMT -6
Are you willing to take suggestions?
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Post by riverwish on Aug 24, 2011 13:17:01 GMT -6
Yes.sorry that I kind of took your name.
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Post by Midnightstar on Aug 24, 2011 16:49:15 GMT -6
Well.... I suggest spacing after a punctuation mark and using capitals when speaking and new sentences? Sorry if I seem rude...?
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