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Post by stormclaw on Aug 19, 2011 12:49:40 GMT -6
Name: Shallowflight
Gender: Tom
Clan: WindClan
Rank: Warrior
Age: 34 moons
Description: Large, muscular ginger tabby with peircing blue eyes. He has long fur and a scar running vertically down his left hind-leg.
Personality: Shallowflight is a kind and caring Warrior. When it comes to his clan he's impressively dedicated and loyal. Shallowflight is social and friendly towards his clan and even other clan cats, but if a war outbreaks than he will fight with his life.
Many might think that Shallowflight is an easy person to communicate with, which is true, but on the inside, he sometimes doubts the loyalty of his clanmates. Thus creating the fact that Shallowflight is a bit selfish, but not enough to become irritating.
History (optional): Shallowflight was abused and hated as a kit. His Mother had despised him ever since he was born, and had looked down upon him.
Shallowflight only wished for a sliver of care from his Mother, or his Father for that matter, but was disappointed every time. He then declared amongst himself that he would no longer cower under his parent's hate and from there, strive off of his independence.
That may be the reason why Shallowflight doubts his clanmate's loyalty, because he believes that cruel cats like his Mother and Father were unloyal and ambitious.
Other: Mate - None (They're up for grabs if anyone would like to be his mate. ^^)
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Post by ravenclaw on Aug 19, 2011 23:47:46 GMT -6
There are a few things wrong with this application. You have the right idea with personality. However, in the Application Form thread, it states that you must have two paragraphs for the personality. Please do so with at least four sentences in each paragraph. Also, position for WindClan deputy has been filled by Crowwing. I am sure there will be chances for high positions later on, so don't feel discouraged. Please fix the personality, change the rank to Warrior (if that is what you wish him to be) and I'll be happy to accept Shallowflight. Sorry for any inconvenience. If you need help to lengthen the personality of Shallowflight, I'll be more than happy to give you some tips.
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Post by stormclaw on Aug 20, 2011 11:43:03 GMT -6
Excuse me, but I am perfectly capable of doing that myself. I believe that Crowwing was chosen as Deputy because my application had less details and was un-interesting. And telling me to not be discouraged won't change anything. I am discouraged.
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Post by ravenclaw on Aug 20, 2011 11:48:29 GMT -6
Sorry to hear that you have been discouraged. And besides, I was only trying to help, you don't need to be rude. Anyway, have fun roleplaying.
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